First, I am very glad that there still are now some new stories. And the story itself is definitely a real VanDusen. Tensioning, surprisingly - so it must be!
But with the speakers I quarrel something. Hatch fits. But just when van Dusen as the main character, an image of an elderly man has me impressed, that is no longer true here. That makes it something hard to seamlessly connect and arrange the new piece in the other ... The other are not quite consistent
But perhaps you can still change the? Even James Bond is always changed back to the person without the essence is greatly changed. If I can take this comparison times ...